Step one: read through the 'Saving Motley Wood' story build-up.
Can you spot where excitement is built?
Step two: read through your build-up part of the plan.
Step three: use the 'Saving Motley Wood' build-up and your plan to help you write your own.
Look at Miss Hall's example below to help.
She looked at her plan to help her write.
After she had washed her hands, Lucy raced down the stairs and back out into the garden. She was starving! On a deckchair, her father was having a snooze in the warm sun. Dad was never disturbed when he was having a nap so Lucy laid down on the grass next to the picnic blanket and daydreamed. As she was thinking what it would be like to have wings and six legs, her mum dashed out of the house with the picnic basket in her hands. She looked surprised.
“You’re not going to believe it, John!” she cried.
“Believe what?” grumbled Dad who sat up in panic from his chair half awake.
“A new flying centre is going to be built in the local area. It’s just been announced on the radio. Think of all the tourism and money this will create. I may even be able to get a job. You know how difficult it’s been to find one,” stated Mum.
All Lucy heard was flying centre. She was so thrilled it felt like she had butterflies in her stomach. What if the flying centre had skydiving, paragliding or micro lighting? This was the best news in the world. She jumped up in joy and hugged her mother and father.
“Can we please go and visit when it’s built? I can’t wait!” pleaded Lucy.
“Of course we can. Now sit down and help me unpack this picnic food,” said Mum.
That afternoon, Lucy swung on her swing while images of the flying centre ran through her mind. What would it look like? What activities could there be? As she swung higher and higher, she imagined herself free-flying under the fabric wings of a paraglider with the tortoiseshell butterflies alongside her.
magpie ideas atmosphere of excitement
Use the scaffold below to help you write. Can you magpie ideas from the text and build an atmosphere of excitement?
After she had ____________, ___ raced down the stairs and ________
_________. She was starving! __________ , ____________________
___________________. Dad was never disturbed when __________ so Lucy ________________________ and daydreamed. As she was thinking what it would be like to _______________, ________ mum dashed out of the house _____________________________. _______________.
“You’re not going to believe it, _______!” she cried.
“Believe what?” ____________________________________.
“A new ______________ is going to be built in the local area. ________
___________. Think of all the tourism and money this will create. _____
_______. _______________________,” stated Mum.
All ____ heard was _______. She was so thrilled it felt like
__________________. What if the _________ had ______, ______ or ______________? This was the _____________. She __________ and hugged her mother and father.
“Can we please go and visit when it’s built? I can’t wait!” pleaded _______.
“Of course we can. ______________________________,” said _____.
That _________, _______________________________. What would it look like? What activities could there be? As she ___________, she imagined __________________________________________.