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Write two sentences that include an embedded relative clause that make perfect sense. As you can see below the the main character from my story has been used as an example. Instead of Isla, write the sentences using your chosen main character from your story.


When you are adding extra information about a person, the relative pronoun we use in 'who'.


When you are adding extra information about an object, the relative pronoun we use is 'that' or 'which'.


1st sentence: Your relative clause should describe your own main character.

2nd sentence: Your relative clause should describe the object your main has in their hand.


Line off if you have half a page or more and complete the warm up before you write the date and LC for today's lesson.



Warm up


Friday 20th November

LC: To write the next part of a story using action and dialogue.

Today we are going to be writing the 4th paragraph to our own versions of the ghost at dinner scene from the story of Macbeth. 


I would like to see you use at least one example of action and dialogue in your paragraph.


Dialogue is a conversation or speech that is written down as part of a piece of narrative text. When writing dialogue, it’s important that you punctuate the speech correctly. Dialogue can be great when advancing the plot of a story. Try using your characters to tell the reader what is happening.



Fleance? What is it? What can you see? Banquo said, frantically peering around.

This action tells the reader that Banquo was scared because of the way he was looking around.


The forest isn't haunted,” sighed Banquo, with one hand resting his horse's reins.

This action tells the reader what Banquo was doing when he spoke.

You are going to be continuing to use your plans that you plotted your new stories on (Monday). 


I you are struggling look carefully at the example below.


We are writing from the point in the story where the dinner guests were concerned and your main character starts to talk to your ghost.


This is the paragraph you get to decide what your ghost could say to your main character. If you look at the dialogue when the ghost is talking in the model, she doesn't say a lot to Isla. Does your ghostly character have more to say to your main character? You decide!

Read the model below. Look how the characters have changed in the story. Remember when you are writing your own versions, so make sure you use the characters from your plan. You may wish to magpie some ideas from the model below but change as much as you can.


The dialogue and action (when it appears) is underlined for you in the paragraph to help you. How will your characters act as they speak? Make your characters interesting!


As well as action and dialogue, I would like to see other features in your writing that we have learned this year. Could you include:


Subordinate clauses using conjunctions

Fronted adverbials

Simile starters

ed openers


Write the next paragraph to your story, just like the model above. Change as much as you can and remember to include at least one example of action and dialogue.


What it should look like in your book


Friday 20th November

LC: To write the next part of a story using action and dialogue.


Situated directly in front of Isla, was now where...






When you have finished, send a picture of your writing to your teacher on Seesaw!