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Tuesday

The Floating Island

The island had appeared overnight.

When people looked up that morning, it was simply there—hovering above the town, surrounded by swirling clouds. At first, everyone thought it was a trick of the light. Then binoculars revealed trees, waterfalls and what looked like a ruined stone tower.

For three days, scientists, reporters and curious visitors gathered below.

Then, on the fourth day, a rope ladder slowly unrolled from the clouds and touched the ground.

Attached to the bottom rung was a note:

One visitor only.

Everyone turned to look at Alex.

Continue the story...

Tuesday 9th June

The Cave

Paragraph 1 – Geoff Disappeared

Tom and Geoff were sitting on the edge of an old quarry when the ground suddenly collapsed beneath Geoff. He slid down the slope and disappeared into a dark hole. Tom called out to his friend and, after hearing him scream, tried to climb down to help. However, he lost his footing and fell into the hole as well.

Paragraph 2 – The Mysterious Cave

Tom landed in a cave where he found Geoff unharmed. While looking around, the boys discovered a skeleton wearing Roman armour, which frightened them both. As they explored further, they noticed a strange red machine hidden in the darkness. It had seats, glowing lights and mysterious writing on its surface.

Paragraph 3 – Activating the Machine

The boys climbed into the machine and watched as more lights switched on. Geoff was curious and wanted to find out what the machine did, but Tom wanted to think carefully before touching anything. Eventually, Geoff pressed one of the blue buttons. Instantly, there was a bright flash of light, a loud noise and everything around them disappeared.

Paragraph 4 – The Machine Took Off

When the light faded, Tom and Geoff realised they were high above the ground. Looking down, they could see fields, trees and a river far below them. Geoff thought he knew how to get back down and carefully pressed another button. Instead of descending, the machine began moving backwards, leaving the boys unsure of where they were going next.

Toolkit

  • Powerful verbs
  • Expanded noun phrases
  • Fronted adverbial
  • Action, dialogue and description
  • Correct punctuation
  • Vary sentence lengths for effect
  • A variety of sentence structures

Sentence Openers

  • One afternoon, ...
  • As Tom and Geoff sat on the edge of the quarry, ...
  • Without warning, ...
  • Suddenly, ...
  • In an instant, ...
  • Before Tom could react, ...
  • To his shock, ...
  • A moment later, ...

Powerful Verbs

  • collapsed
  • crumbled
  • slid
  • tumbled
  • plunged
  • vanished
  • scrambled
  • slipped
  • grabbed
  • called

Expanded Noun Phrases

  • the steep quarry edge
  • the crumbling ground beneath Geoff
  • the dark, hidden hole
  • the rocky slope below
  • the terrified boy
  • the dangerous quarry

Feelings Vocabulary

  • shocked
  • frightened
  • worried
  • panicked
  • alarmed
  • anxious

Example Description Phrases

  • his heart pounded with fear
  • his stomach twisted with worry
  • the ground gave way beneath him
  • the earth suddenly crumbled
  • an echoing scream filled the air
  • he disappeared from sight

 

Tuesday 9th June

LC: To write an independent recount

 

Entry 1

26th November, 1922

When Carter makes a small hole and peers into the antechamber

Entry 2

27th November, 1922

When Carter enters the antechamber for the first time with Lord Carnarvon