Task: Using your notes of the clip up to  minutes and the narrative toolkit write the scene. 

Remember to use the toolkit we create.

Toolkit for a narrative: character and setting.

• Third person, present tense

• Character alone with thoughts during the journey – apprehensive/excited

• Character is given a warning by a stranger of the dangers of where they are going

• Fronted adverbials for where – At her side, Up close,

• Objects are described as cold and bitter giving a sense of isolation and loneliness e.g. hard, wooden bench, unrelenting wind

• Character and parent view the land/their new home.

• Description using powerful adjectives, e.g. rolling gunmetal waves, forbidden part of the universe

• Sense of awe with the characters, e.g. A hushed voice full of awe and wonder.

• Parent keen for the response of the child – ‘What do you think?’ Only a little speech used.

• Adverbs, e.g. she said breathlessly … really caught her eye

• Further description of what can be seen – use of powerful verbs – hummed, shrouded

• Similes – like a ladder reaching right up to space

• adverb sentence starter